That took a creepy turn but perfectly told by the boys :) Oh yes, the coffin bells! A great snapshot of these characters and their life/time period :)
He told mam... I'd put another quotation mark here, "He told mam..." because it's a continuation of the dialogue from the previous paragraph. (At least you didn't close the quotes and then re-open them as if it's another, second, speaker, because I see that a lot online from younger authors and it drives me crazy trying to figure out who's speaking!)
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Date: 2019-01-09 03:33 pm (UTC)A great snapshot of these characters and their life/time period :)
He told mam...
I'd put another quotation mark here, "He told mam..." because it's a continuation of the dialogue from the previous paragraph. (At least you didn't close the quotes and then re-open them as if it's another, second, speaker, because I see that a lot online from younger authors and it drives me crazy trying to figure out who's speaking!)