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meridian_rose ([personal profile] meridian_rose) wrote in [personal profile] dmousey 2019-01-09 03:33 pm (UTC)

That took a creepy turn but perfectly told by the boys :) Oh yes, the coffin bells!
A great snapshot of these characters and their life/time period :)

He told mam...
I'd put another quotation mark here, "He told mam..." because it's a continuation of the dialogue from the previous paragraph. (At least you didn't close the quotes and then re-open them as if it's another, second, speaker, because I see that a lot online from younger authors and it drives me crazy trying to figure out who's speaking!)


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