LJI The Fire Faerie's Tale

[dmousey]

With a flick and a flurrying of wings, Teine awoke. Cracking open an eye, she quickly filled with fury as opening the other confirmed her colors' continuing absence. Oh, they were there, she could sense them, but her ability to touch, manipulate, or control her brand of fire magic had been set agonizingly out of Tiene's reach. Worse, she was blind to the glorious red, gold, and oranges of fire - her personal element.

Every day Teine spent smouldering against the witch who had cursed her, brought a higher risk of crisping innocent wings, or burning down the glens and forests. In trying to light hearth fires, she'd create bonfires; or if she lost her temper, every candle would come alight - in holders or not, causing chaos and mayhem.

The Council, growing increasingly afraid of Teine's losing herself completely, banned her to the Oceanside. The shores along the sea held a warren of caves, and making a comfortable home should be easy for her. Feeling deep compassion for their sister Faerie, they gifted Teine a lyre, the instrument she cherished most.

Every emotion wound its way into her playing, her nimble fingers coaxing forth melodies and memories, of Autumn leaves and sunsets. Her desperate yearning to touch and be whole with her abilities lay unanswered day after day, the witch's curse remained.

Centuries passing without a change to her affliction were having another effect on Teine, her wings were shriveling, and as they did, she fell perilously close to giving up. Yet, every sunset she'd still be found, playing her lyre to the sky she couldn't see, and strumming and plucking the harmonics of her natural element remaining the only thing worth living for.

One evening the sky fell alight with meteor showers stopping Teine's playing mid-note. Watching them streak across the sky, inspiration struck, and tapping into the last vestiges of hope for herself she began playing an homage to her element. Her runs and trills becoming arpeggios, and finally crescendoing into palettes of amber, bronze, scarlet and more. Teine's pouring of her life into song, touched all living beings around her. The hauntingly ethereal notes causing more than one eye to tear.

Suddenly feeling a wondrous magic only existing in her dreams, a magnificent Unicorn stepped from the ocean waves walking toward Teine. It touched her tear stained cheek with its horn, shattering the witch's curse, and causing her shriveled wings to unfurl.

Sobbing with overwhelming joy at being whole with her magic, Teine, transformed her tears into rubies, and using strands of her hair, she weaved a brilliant ruby chain. Reverently approaching her savior and draping her offering around the Unicorn's neck, she hoped it would be enough.

Knowing it never could be.



Thank you for reading! All concrit is welcome!

Comments

[the_eternal_overthinker]

Aha! This is lovely. I hope to see this world of Teine again soon :) I am already in love with her :D Good to see you here and looking forward to reading you :) Cheers!

[rayaso]

I'm glad to see that you're participating! I hope this is an introduction to more faerie fantasies. I enjoyed this one very much, and am obviously hoping for more.

[bleodswean]

*HUGS* Happy to see you again, m'dear!

And this is a lovely lovely little snippet of fantasy. You brought a ton of world and character, motivation, feeling and story to this.

[meridian_rose]

Great work! You capture the sense of loss and joy of renewal so beautifully!

[tatdatcm]

Beautiful. I love how she turns to music to sooth her soul. The picture of the ruby tears and the chain she makes for the unicorn was lovely.

[bellatrixe]

I really loved this and would love to read more about this world! <3

[wolfden]

I liked this peak into Teine.

[murielle]

Beautiful my dear! The weight of your words, and the weight of the curse, and poor Teine's sorrow filled my heart as I read.

Beautiful work! Hugs!

[bewize]

Poor Teine. You could really feel her sorrow and rage.

[troof_therry]

This is really lovely. I have way less I feel qualified to concrit about here than before. Based on the comments, I would say you're right about the age-level you're pitching to. It's a very musical, captivating way of answering the prompt.

[megatronix]

Aw this is so beautiful. I love a good sweet magical tale!

[reidharriscooper]

Quickly created a world and atmosphere in a short amount of time here.

[halfshellvenus]

I liked the repeated mentions of Autumn here, as those fire-like colors fit perfectly with a fire-fairy who so loves flames.

I think having her lose control of her power, as opposed to losing the power altogether, made for an interesting choice. She still has fire, but without control it's too dangerous to risk using.

Nice to see you back. :)

[zedmanauk]

Well written. I like the imagery of the faerie world.

[favoritebean_writes]

What a magical narrative. I love how music is part of the magic, and the colors they create.

[moretta]

I would read a whole series of this. I just want to know more! (Always the mark of a great story!)
Wonderful.

[flipflop_diva]

Awww this is lovely! I really like the world you've created here, and I would love to see more of it!

[alycewilson]

An intriguing world you've created! I love that after experiencing so much pain, she found hope and redemption.